My First Japanese Song! O.O

[Crystal Lizzy]

Oh My! Well, the boredom of Science class has got to me so now... I have made a Japanese song. But it's really short since I am just an amateur (hehe...). It's called "Tight Ribbon Knots" and hopefully when I learn more Japanese, I can finally write the entire song I desired for. So yeah, here it is! (And if my Japanese is wrong, please let me know! thanx!)

Tight Ribbon Knots

Minna, bokutachi wasurete
Ima, watashi wakatte, ne?
Haha to Chichi, wakarinai
Jimmy, koko wa, ii janai ka?

Join Join Join
Denwa wa doko desu ka?
Hai Hai Hai
Achira Mama

Kono kanashimi, kono tanoshii...

TAITO Ribbon Knots naka de!

~English Translation~

Everybody, we're all forgetting
Now, I understand right?
Mother and Father, I don't know
Jimmy, this place, is it good?

Join Join Join
Where is the phone?
Yes Yes Yes
Overthere Mama

That sadness, that pleasure...

In those tight ribbon knots!

[Seraphy]

Seems nice. I actually understood most of it before reading the translation.

Haha and Chichi can mean mother and father. But to me, it sounds kinda funny sometimes. I just like saying Oto-san or Kaa-san.

[Dusk]

Yeah Same thing Seraphy said....maybe I'm just used to oto-san and kaa-san from watching too much anime...and advent childeren.....Amazingly I actually understood some of it w/out teh translationsO_o

[Crystal Lizzy]

Well, I would have used them since most songs in Japanese use "kaasan" or "otosan" but I put "haha" and "chichi" cuz it fit the rhythm. If you guys knew the translation before you read the english translation, then I must have been like writing it in easy lines... I guess that means some changes! And this time I'll take some lines from my Japanese book! XD Well, thanx for the comments and suggestions...