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Irein
November 12th, 2007, 06:55 PM
It was nearly twelve that night. The moon had just risen, very golden and novel, lying over the hill and watching vividly, powerfully; gazing through the maze of an ash tree’s naked limbs. She walks curiously, becoming part of the soft, short grass and gentle, melodic wind.

Listening intently, she hears the stream’s whispering giggle as it flows past her; such a sneaky snake sliding beneath her feet and moving onwards into the beyond. The birds, singing quietly their lullabies amongst kin; an owl, perched high among the trees with an echoing hoot.

She halts, aware of a dim, thriving light all around. Upon the dark, stirring trees endless pink buds and petals all delicate and blurred were being stung to life by the mesmerizing moonlight. From this moment she felt a bit of companionship, as if a million spirits had glided by and settled between blissful sky and fragile ground; opening and shutting their wings on a level with her eyes.

In the wondrous, still, fragrant beauty she almost lost memory of why she had come to the forest. The soothing glamour which had clothed the earth all day had not disappeared now that night had fallen, but only transformed into this new transient form. She moved on through the thicket of stems and leaves covered with that live, powdering brightness until she reached the large cherry blossom tree. No mistaking that, even in the dark, nearly twice the height and size of any other, and leaning out towards open meadows and stream.

Under the deep branches she stood still again, to listen. The same sounds exactly. She places her hands on the dry, almost warm tree trunk, whose sleek, mossy surface gave forth a peaty scent at her touch. And there rose the busy chatter of the little trout stream, whereas the moon was flinging glances through the bars of her branchy prison. The blossom on a level with her eyes seemed to grow more living every moment, seemed with its mysterious pink beauty more and more a part of her suspense. She plucks a fragment and held it close—four petals. Sacrilege to pluck cherry blossoms—silky, sacred, young blossoms—and throw it away.

Then suddenly, she hears a shuffle within the leaves not of her own, and so, leaning against the trunk, she presses her hands to its mossy sides from behind, and holding her breath. A defying wind shouts out and guides the many blossoms that wish to take its first flight. As the sweet petals befall swiftly onto the unsoiled earth, she finally saw her beloved; his dark form part of a soaring tree, his flushed face part of its blossom; so motionless, and peering towards her, smiling. She whispered: “Brendan!” and held out her hands.

Seraphy
November 12th, 2007, 08:40 PM
Wow, that was beautiful! Judging by your other posts, you like English, right? I think you'd make a wonderful novelist. :3

I love all the imagery and detail you put into this, kinda makes me want to draw a picture of it. (If I may?) And have time. XP

RedSunEternal
November 13th, 2007, 05:28 AM
Very nice. I love the descriptiveness and depth. Kinda made me feel like a girl, which was impressive. I loved the prose and tone of the entire thing, and the poetic style worked really well. The hanging ending made me a little grumpy, but all hanging endings do, and at least this one was well done.

I think part of the reason I like it is that it's so different from my style of writing as an interesting side note.

Irein
November 13th, 2007, 06:03 PM
Wow, that was beautiful! Judging by your other posts, you like English, right? I think you'd make a wonderful novelist. :3
Thanks. I do admit that I enjoy writing. :) But just as a flower needs water, I still need to learn.

I love all the imagery and detail you put into this, kinda makes me want to draw a picture of it. (If I may?) And have time. XP
Please, feel free to do whatever you choose. This is YOUR forum, is it not? :P Though I am flattered you would want to draw this.

Very nice. I love the descriptiveness and depth. Kinda made me feel like a girl, which was impressive. I loved the prose and tone of the entire thing, and the poetic style worked really well. The hanging ending made me a little grumpy, but all hanging endings do, and at least this one was well done.
LOL. I thank you for the comments, and I'm impressed myself that I made you feel womanly during that little read. :blush:

I think part of the reason I like it is that it's so different from my style of writing as an interesting side note.
I have not seen your writing, I don't think. Please enlighten me, if you have the time to. :)

Seraphy
November 13th, 2007, 06:36 PM
Please, feel free to do whatever you choose. This is YOUR forum, is it not? :P Though I am flattered you would want to draw this.

It is. But the concept belongs to you. :)

Irein
November 13th, 2007, 06:42 PM
It is. But the concept belongs to you. :)
If you have a delectable means of producing a work from my piece, I shall support you. If you have any complications which need my service, please duely note. :P

RedSunEternal
November 13th, 2007, 11:13 PM
My writing is basically the rants that you read in my topic. That's generally how I write, although my RP posts are part of it as well.

Irein
November 14th, 2007, 06:03 PM
My writing is basically the rants that you read in my topic. That's generally how I write, although my RP posts are part of it as well.
Well, you see, your writing in the "Huh, I've put them everywhere else" topic is very logic-crazed and full of wonder. I enjoy reading your "rants" and I notice a striking kind of logic in that you try to answer all the "big questions" that I'm sure everyone in life has wanted to answer before. It's good to see some thought into it, and I suppose it's never too late to think of such inquiries.

RedSunEternal
November 14th, 2007, 09:07 PM
:blush: Why thank you.

It's not necessarily big question stuff, though that's what it's been recently. And sometimes it's because I'm too lazy to get up and write down the uninteresting stuff. All my rants are also heavily influenced by my philosophy teacher that I had about six months ago. He was amazing, and made me consider a Philosophy major.

Keep up the good work, btw.

Irein
November 15th, 2007, 01:18 PM
:blush: Why thank you.

It's not necessarily big question stuff, though that's what it's been recently. And sometimes it's because I'm too lazy to get up and write down the uninteresting stuff. All my rants are also heavily influenced by my philosophy teacher that I had about six months ago. He was amazing, and made me consider a Philosophy major.

Keep up the good work, btw.
Thank you, though recently my motivation for much of anything these days has been blown away by histrionic socialism. I haven't a philosophy teacher of the moment, though such topics catch the apple of my eye, so that is why I have been able to gallantly rummage through each word of your intellect in that topic (It was hard thinking though, mind you. :P).

I suppose if anything, I'll treat this Writing section as database, for now. ;)